Dry cleaning industry web sites x 2

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Hi team,
I have two web sites.
1. sells my managment and marketing system for dry cleaning industry.
2. Is a directory to help drive trafic to the other site.
They work ok but I would like better conversion rates.
Please give your honest advise
thanks
Ray

www.drycleaningsuccess.com

www.drycleaningdirectory.com

Hi Ray,

I am not really an expert on Marketing online or such, So the problem i am going to mention i see i dont have a solution to sorry. But for me the site which is selling you product, www.drycleaningsuccess.com from me arriving at that site all i see is the same as every other site that offers similar products they have there 2 or 3 pages(some a lot more) of sale spiel then they ask you to pay for this product that is going to give them all the success. Now there isnt really a problem with this but for anyone that has seen one or two of these like me i know when i hit one and i just back stright out.

What sort of conversion rate are you getting? What sort of rate do would you like?

Anyway i hope i wasnt to harsh, i am just replying to your email as well.

[Watsu55]

This page is basically 98% marketing hype. It's very difficult to figure out what exactly you get for $247. It also makes the dry cleaning business sound like some fast paced investment market or something. There's no "Dry Cleaning Game" to beat, ya know?

The site is also very hard to use, if I were a prospect trying to figure out the details of this software I would probably give up after reading all of the marketing jargon.

You need to get rid of that picture of the box, it looks VERY tacky, considering how important packaging is to the consumer, this will probably turn them off right away as it's the first thing they see.

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Thankyou.
It good toget construtive feed back. I am building a new site and will wse your sugestions.
Thanksagain.